Wednesday, May 9, 2012

Paying a Debt

I owe some old Word & Question entries. The answers to the questions are hidden. The first is, I think, the better and more important of the two, though I am not completely satisfied. It feels unfinished.

In the Silence After the Rain
Beneath the wide and starry sky
Together we lie, my lover and I
In the mists that follow the rain
With soft caress and fleeting sigh
Our love we give, our life to die
In the silence after the rain

Word: Silence
Question: What's your favorite season?
Ascetic Verses
Bare the wall that held the door
Coarse the wood and cold the floor
Upon the stones he stood and prayed
While all around the demons played
A silent war, a hidden rage
For souls they fought upon the stage
For priests and brothers, sisters, daughters
Sons and mothers, virgins, lovers
For holy sinners, drunks and whores
Dramas won on silent shores
Battles joined for hidden stores
The ascetic fights a wordless war

Word: Ascetic
Question: Dare I enter?


  1. +JMJ+

    If you hadn't mentioned it, I wouldn't have thought the first poem was unfinished as much as strategically left hanging. But there are some poems or songs that go nowhere and are still beautiful--such as Lana Del Rey's Video Games.

    The second poem is my favourite of these two. As Chesterton said, "The greatest of all poems is an inventory."

    I like that the answers are so hidden in the poems that nobody can guess the questions unless they already know them. If you have a key, then you know to look for a lock; but if you have a lock, you don't always know if it needs a key.

    Thanks for posting, Dauvit! =) I'm sure everyone else will be delighted to read these as well.

  2. Yes, sir! Both of these poems are very fine, indeed. The first has a certain Yeatsian musicality, if I'm not phrasing it too oddly. But I think I share Enbrethiliel's preference for the second--the phrasing seems livelier; it fascinates immediately!

    I think that "What's your favorite season?" may have been my question; I confess, I don't remember! But I'm enjoying the puzzle you've provided by your concealment of the answer!

  3. Oh, I've been offline so much recently! (Just crazy-busy...) What a treat to come back and find both of these. I join the others in "voting" for the second, but that's mostly because monastic life captures my imagination for some reason. Both are lovely.